IELTS Band S6.
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Lesson 1 - Tourism
Students will be able to:
● understand the criteria of Writing task 2 band 6 - 7
● practice evaluating essays using checklist
A. BAND DESCRIPTOR
I. Read the band descriptor and complete the following tasks.
Task response Coherence and Lexical Resources Grammatical range
Cohesion and accuracy
5 ▪ addresses the task ▪ presents information ▪ uses a limited range ▪ uses only a limited
only partially; the with some of vocabulary, but this range of structures
format may be organisation but there is minimally adequate ▪ attempts complex
inappropriate in may be a lack of for the task sentences but these
places overall progression ▪ may make tend to be less
▪ expresses a position ▪ makes inadequate, noticeable errors in accurate than simple
but the development inaccurate or over use spelling and/or word sentences
is not always clear of cohesive devices formation that may ▪ may make frequent
and there may be no ▪ may be repetitive cause some difficulty grammatical errors
conclusions drawn because of lack of for the reader and punctuation may
▪ presents some main referencing and be faulty; errors can
ideas but these are substitution cause some difficulty
limited and not ▪ may not write in for the reader
sufficiently paragraphs, or
developed; there may paragraphing may be
be irrelevant detail inadequate
6 ▪ addresses all parts of ▪ arranges information ▪ uses an adequate ▪ uses a mix of simple
the task although and ideas coherently range of vocabulary and complex sentence
some parts may be and there is a clear for the task forms
more fully covered overall progression ▪ attempts to use less ▪ makes some errors
than others ▪ uses cohesive de- common vocabulary in grammar and
▪ presents a relevant vices effectively, but but with some punctuation but they
position although the cohesion within and/ inaccuracy rarely reduce
conclusions may or between sentences ▪ makes some errors communication
become unclear or may be faulty or in spelling and/or
repetitive mechanical word formation, but
▪ presents relevant ▪ may not always use they do not impede
main ideas but some referencing clearly or communication
may be inadequately appropriately
developed/unclear ▪ uses paragraphing,
but not always
logically
7 ▪ addresses all parts of ▪ logically organis- es ▪ uses a sufficient ▪ uses a variety of
the task information and ideas; range of vocabulary to complex structures
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▪ presents a clear there is clear allow some flexibility ▪ produces frequent
position throughout progression through- and precision error-free sentences
the response out ▪ uses less common ▪ has good control of
▪ presents, extends ▪ uses a range of lexical items with grammar and
and supports main cohesive devices ap- some awareness of punctuation but may
ideas, but there may propriately although style and collocation make a few errors
be a tendency to there may be some ▪ may produce
overgeneralise and/or under-/over-use occasional errors in
supporting ideas may ▪ presents a clear word choice, spelling
lack focus central topic within and/or word formation
each paragraph
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1. What do these phrases mean?
a. addresses the task only partially: ……………………………………………………………….
b. overall progression: ……………………………………………………………………………
c. referencing and substitution: ……………………………………………………………………
d. complex sentences: …………………………………………………………………………….
e. idiomatic and less common vocabulary: ………………………………………………………
f. relevant ideas: ……………………………………………………………………………………
2. Here is a checklist for Writing task 2. What criteria does each question fall into?
1 ⬜ Did you write at least 250 words?
2 ⬜ Did you address all parts of the task?
3 ⬜ Did you include a clear thesis statement in the introduction?
4 ⬜ Did you include a topic sentence in each body paragraph?
5 ⬜ Did you give relevant ideas to support your argument?
6 ⬜ Did you give adequate explanations and examples to your ideas?
7 ⬜ Did you write 4 paragraphs in your essay, including an introduction - 2 body
paragraphs - a conclusion?
8 ⬜ Did you sequence your ideas logically?
9 ⬜ Did you use a wide range of cohesive devices?
10 ⬜ Did you use reference and substitution correctly?
11 ⬜ Did you use a wide range of vocabulary with accurate meaning?
12 ⬜ Did you use words with higher level meanings?
13 ⬜ Did you avoid making spelling mistakes and/or word formation?
14 ⬜ Did you use topic-related vocabulary?
15 ⬜ Did you use any idiomatic expressions?
16 ⬜ Did you avoid excessive repetition?
17 ⬜ Did you write your essay with an academic (formal) writing style?
18 ⬜ Did you avoid making grammatical mistakes?
19 ⬜ Did you write complex sentences correctly?
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20 ⬜ Did you use punctuation accurately?
21 ⬜ Did you use a wide range of tenses and structures?
3. How may this checklist help your writing?
B. EXAM PRACTICE
II. Evaluate the following essay. What features of band 5 / band 6 / band 7 does this writing
have?
Today, more people are traveling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of
traveling for travelers?
It is common nowadays that, the number of visitors has increased higher than it did in the past (1).
Due to recent advancement in our transportation industry, travelers not only want to explore their
own country but also the entire world (2). In this essay, I will discuss the reason why travel has
become so popular and the positive effects for the travelers (3).
To begin with, it is important to understand why people choose to travel more (4). From my point of
view, Due to the affordable prices and numerous deals, traveling has made more accessible to a
wider range of people (5). In some festivals, airlines and hotels compete intensely on pricing and
frequently offer discounts and special deals to attract visitors (6). With this discount price, travelers
can explore new destinations without overspending and making travel a realistic goal for more
people than before (7).
In addition, what are the advantages of traveling for visitors? (8) In my opinion, traveling provides a
variety of opportunities for culture understanding and lifestyles of people in each country are
different (9). Moreover, visiting another country helps us to improve our knowledge about
languages, customs and traditions (10). Traveling also broadens our perspectives, fostering open
mindedness and a deeper appreciation for cultural diversity (11).
To sum up, the main reason for people choosing traveling is the accessibility of the tourism industry
has become more practical for people (12). And the advantages gained, such as relishing range of
cultures and a drive to improve living are elaborated (13).
III. Write the introduction and two body paragraphs for the following task.
Today, more people are traveling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of
traveling for travelers?
